My biggest fear in life...is to loose my daughter.
Never really thought about it...
99% of my thoughts when it comes thinking about her are joyful, happy and well-being thoughts, just like she is...but now the question arises...
it would be worst to loose her than to die...to die in life.
My eyes would be lost, pampered with tears seeking her simle and golden ash hair in everyone everywhere and the sea would turn to fresh water
My breath would be breathless and the wind would stop blowing.
My heart would shrink into a hole deep, black and tight; no beating, no pounding, no jumping for joy and flowers would hinder from blooming.
My voice would be voiceless, no words to yell out in her chase and the my surrounding would become a sudden silence.
My arms would be useless tools no more hugging no more embracing, cold emptyness to cuddle with and the branches from trees would fall to the ground with sorrow.
My heavy legs static would drag to no about lands and the world would stop it`s rotation around the sun...
Fernanda, I love the way you describe what would happen to different parts of your body if you were to lose your daughter. You can really picture how intense this fear is.
ResponderEliminarThe power of feeling is very strong in this piece. It brings tears as I imagine my own mother experiencing this deep sense of loss, a loss so deep that it affects your vision of the world. I appreciate how the loss is carried throughout the body and defined with all the senses. Would the line "the sea would turn to fresh water" be more powerful if it stood on its own? The way you have intertwined your body's response and nature's response to this loss is incredibly powerful and striking. It is a writing strategy that creates fierce imagery.
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